OK, never done this before...

So I'm working on a plotbunny caliopeamphora suggested an awfully long time ago, and having a fine time of it but have reached my authorial endpoint, I think. As in, I no longer know my own ass from my elbow here, and have Peter Principled myself up to my level of incompetence once again ;)

I like it, though. And I don't particularly want to toss it out. But I'm also not willing to post it publicly as is, since I have a sneaking suspicion that it makes little or no sense whatsoever and plays merry hell with characterizations to boot. And while it's not meant for a huge readership (it's just a Bond DVD-Extras thingy) I still like to think I've got some standards, and they generally involve not posting utter dreck if it's at all possible.

OK, so, why am I telling anybody this?

If anybody has some spare time and wouldn't mind clicking on the cut-link and giving me any feedback that comes to mind, I would much appreciate it. Any feedback is welcome, including grammar, typos, consistency errors, flow problems, dialogue, characterization, plot holes, and general malaise.

BTW, when I say any feedback, I really do mean any feedback. I once took a Legal Drafting class where we regularly critiqued one another's efforts with "Huh??!" and "this is incomprehensible garbage." I've got a thick skin ;)

So, for the brave hearted: this is a Bond DVD Extra, so if you haven't read Bond it'll make no sense at all. It takes place during chapters 11 - 12, when Harry and Draco's friends and family take part in a healing circle. It basically retells the circle scene from Lucius Malfoy's POV.

Yeah, the Lucius who's a real bitch. To write.

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ETA: If you don't feel comfortable leaving feedback in public, please send it to fugazzianna@yahoo.ca.